I am a Year 5 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
hello uh this is very nice but idk what to say about this i guess it pretty good so maybe you could not just make the sentences a whole lines please but yo your doing good if your at your best right?
Kia ora Limihai I like your story about the cold mountains I like how you had a hook start and how lim climbs up mount everest.Maybe you could improve writing?
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughul - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
hello uh this is very nice but idk
ReplyDeletewhat to say about this i guess it pretty good so maybe you could not just make the sentences a whole lines please
but yo your doing good if your at your best right?
Kia ora Limihai I like your story about the cold mountains I like how you had a hook start and how lim climbs up mount everest.Maybe you could improve writing?
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