I am a Year 5 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Limihai, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I enjoyed the onomatopoeia and adjectives you chose to help create a relaxed mood. How do you think it would feel to make it through to the end of a war?
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Kia ora Limihai, thank you for sharing your descriptive writing. I enjoyed the onomatopoeia and adjectives you chose to help create a relaxed mood. How do you think it would feel to make it through to the end of a war?
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