I am a Year 5 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia ora Limihai Thank you for sharing your poem. I love how you used rhyme and sound effects. Next time I would suggest speaking a little slower (or sometimes fast, sometimes slow for emphasis). Your poem was funny especially the shock ending! Well done.
Kia ora Limihai, its your classmate Ruqayat. I really liked your slam poetry. I especially loved the rhymes and the sounds in background. I just suggest you change the speed of how fast you talk depending on what your reading. For example, if you were reading something sad, you would most likely read slowly. Kind Regards ¬ Ruqayat.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughul - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia ora Limihai
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your poem. I love how you used rhyme and sound effects. Next time I would suggest speaking a little slower (or sometimes fast, sometimes slow for emphasis). Your poem was funny especially the shock ending! Well done.
Kia ora Limihai, its your classmate Ruqayat. I really liked your slam poetry. I especially loved the rhymes and the sounds in background. I just suggest you change the speed of how fast you talk depending on what your reading. For example, if you were reading something sad, you would most likely read slowly. Kind Regards ¬ Ruqayat.
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